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The Right Way and the Wrong Way
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Typo: some of the other woman who work there
Switched into past tense here: The raccoon bowed slightly.
Another typo: the helving units
Very charming story, and typical of the author. It does hint at a lot of world-building without explaining much, and I wish more of it was elaborated on, but what's here is very fun. I'm a little surprised Linda didn't see this coming when the road bent the wrong way, given that she apparently is used to this kind of thing, but having her react differently could spoil the surprise. I'm also curious whether the multiple Earths mean parallel worlds, as in are there multiple Martys out there. Maybe a bit fast with the hints of a developing romance, since Linda had never shown any interest before, but maybe the short time available has pressed her into action.
Switched into past tense here: The raccoon bowed slightly.
Another typo: the helving units
Very charming story, and typical of the author. It does hint at a lot of world-building without explaining much, and I wish more of it was elaborated on, but what's here is very fun. I'm a little surprised Linda didn't see this coming when the road bent the wrong way, given that she apparently is used to this kind of thing, but having her react differently could spoil the surprise. I'm also curious whether the multiple Earths mean parallel worlds, as in are there multiple Martys out there. Maybe a bit fast with the hints of a developing romance, since Linda had never shown any interest before, but maybe the short time available has pressed her into action.
>>Pascoite
Thanks, Pasco:
I'd say there's a solid first draft here, and I'll definitely be working on it for submission to the various markets.
Mike
Thanks, Pasco:
I'd say there's a solid first draft here, and I'll definitely be working on it for submission to the various markets.
Mike