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Though some of the lines are very crude, they stand out only by being the exception. The use of colors is fantastic, and Starlight's expression is :mwah: just perfect.

On its own, this piece is a bit of a non-sequitur – Why is Starlight gawking in trepidation at a floating nautilus? Only once taken with the context of the story that inspired it, everything clicks: we then understand what's going on, and the shading in the background serve dual purpose of framing and the actual "fishbowl".

I already noted Starlight's expression – just grand. I also particularly appreciate how you took "royal license" with the "crown" of the nautilus "head" (I'm bad at cephalopod anatomy, okay?), as a deviation from the real-world creatures.

(I know I wrote 'Nautilus' as the body that he ruled, and I also wrote a description that was more like a cuttlefish; I think you made the right call from the two available options, from a visual-artist perspective.)
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· · >>KwirkyJ
Don't smile, Starlight. Such action is a grievous offense in Ishmael's kingdom.

Just like KwirkyJ, I like the dumbfounded expression of Starlight's. Oh, the eyes, they tell everything... However, the mane seems to blend into one, that the turquoise and purple stripes are not well-defined. Maybe it's the lack of sleep caused by stressing over her assignment?

Another thing I like is the nautilus itself. I've had trouble trying to visualize Ishmael, but that's the purpose of art. Illustrate something that the text is describing.

Thanks for arting!
#3 · 1
· · >>PinoyPony
>>PinoyPony
Don't smile, Starlight. Such action is a grievous offense in Ishmael's kingdom.

If you're making a joke, disregard: read carefully again and you should find that it's not the smile but the raised and/or waving hoof that is the insult -- they communicate with their tentacles, after all. ;)
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>>KwirkyJ
My bad. Ugh... my comprehension sucks... :facepalm: