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Here at the End of all Things. · FiM Short Story ·
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#1 · 1
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
Did Applejack made that sign? Because the heart sorta looks like an apple. Speaking of whom, did she sprout a horn? Or did Rarity change her manestyle and swiped AJ's hat to accesorise?

But hey, those are just nitpicks, I can still feel that melancholic happiness from Twilight's expression. I also liked the darkness creeping upon her as the nothingness takes over.
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· · >>horizon >>GroaningGreyAgony
It took me some time to realise this wasn't Celestia but Twilight (I haven't read the story).

Aside from that, the composition is excellent, and all the little details add together and to the whole. Hat off for the picture of Twilight's friends. It felt very lively and real, despite its small size and the lack of colours and background.

Zis iz eksellent stuhff, Zis iz gud. Top tier.
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· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
This one only had two reviews. Anyone else want to drop some feedback on our poor underappreciated artists?

Like >>Fenton this really threw me when I realized it was Twilight — she's got a peytral very similar to Celestia's (except for the cutie mark/element of harmony star), the tiara and long flowing mane, the long neck/Celestial proportions, and she's holding up a scroll with a picture from Ponyville just like Celestia does in the show opening. If you intended to make some sort of point about Twilight taking over Celestia's role or something (like Fenton, apologies, haven't read the source story), you may have succeeded a little too well. The black-and-white format may have worked against you here: even a little bit of splash color to draw attention to the star, or some spot purple highlighting on Twilight's pelt, might have been enough of a "Wait, what?" prod to draw the eye to the figure and resolve the dissonance.

The composition is effective, but the execution feels uneven to me. You've got this amazing detail in the picture, and this smudgy effect in the left outer darkness, but what looks like scribbles in the darkness to the right and the haze surrounding the picture. The dissonance is disorienting me a bit, and I think this would have been stronger sticking to a single style.

This does do some interesting things, though, and Celestia's Twilight's (edit: dammit my brain just cannot accept that) thousand-yard stare is sticking with me. Thanks for submitting!
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>>Zaid Val'Roa, >>Fenton, >>horizon

Undiminished: Retrospective

After Entropy’s ending choked me up, I figured it would make a good subject. Sadly, I was too busy to sit down and work on it until the last day. I drew Twilight and the tile in charcoal, then drew the others in pencil on a separate paper, and combined it all in Photoshop. (The pencil sketch is here.)

I had intended for Dash to be quickly taking AJ’s hat and plonking it on Rarity; you can tell by her expression that she’s up to something. Both Rarity and AJ are likely aware that something is wrong, but both do not wish to ruin the picture by causing a ruckus, though Dash is probably in for some Stern Words or a Swift Kick afterwards. This all might have been clearer if I’d had time to color it, which would also have made it obvious that Twilight is the main subject.

Thank you for your kind comments!