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On The Wings of a Dream · FiM Short Story ·
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Goodnight Moon
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#1 · 2
· · >>Anon Y Mous
Wow, this piece is extremely attention grabbing!Great use of shape and color to draw our eyes to the sharply-defined, stark-white armor, that sticks out from the dream-like pastels of the background. It's also a really neat choice to hide Luna's eyes, here. Overall, really cool! Thanks for submitting!
#2 ·
Some pieces of her armor are wonky and her magic at its core is kind of off but otherwise...

Nice. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
#3 ·
· · >>Anon Y Mous
Easily my favourite of the three. The design of the crescent scythe's handle as a Cloudsdale-like piece of moulded wispy cumulus is brilliant, the kind of idea that makes me go "Why didn't I think of that?" You inspire your inspiration.

I do have to echo Anon Y Mous up there and say that some of the armour does look a tad off. The rear shoes stand out in this respect, but her left forehoof looks closer to a glove than to a gauntlet, and the shoulder spikes would work more if there were stronger signs she was leaning to her right more. Proportions like that don't stand out at a distance, but it might be worth being more ruthless about them close-up, or when laying down the outline.

I'm also uncertain as to a couple of flourishes, like why her eyes are concealed and she has yak-tacular glowing horns on either side of her head (I did wonder if they were meant to be eyes, but if so, they seem too far apart for that). Or why her mane is so big, love that rising tide of colour though I do. Overall, the piece is still strong and dramatic, but I'm puzzled by some of these embellishments, which might just be stylistic, but I'm not sure enough to rule out minor mistakes or misjudgements in layout or something. Or maybe I just keep comparing it to a more conventional depiction of Luna and haven't really grasped the benefits of the alternatives. I'm not really that artistically sophisticated, so if there's, for instance, a deeper symbolism involved, I'm stumped.

The swirly lines I don't get, either. Best guess is that they're meant to represent magical transfer from Luna to scythe. That holds from her horn to her crescent, fair enough, but then I see the lines from hooves to handle and I'm beat.

I really do like this one, though. I don't want to come across as too critical. As it is, this is a dramatic scene captured with original elements and an eye for serenity. Whatever my complaints about its wonky layout, the winter-themed armour is an inspired touch, and if I can't say why the swirly lines and Luna's face are the way they are, they're at least depicted reasonably well as-is. I even like the little touches, such as the glow at the base of Luna's curving horn and the almost bloodlike symbol on her chest. Nicely done!
#4 · 1
· · >>Anon Y Mous
Exquisite, elegant, curvaceous and non salacious. The moonscythe looks rather uncomfortable to use, but art is not always supposed to be comforting. Kudos for keeping the stars behind the moon. This will go to the top of my slate.
#5 ·

Haven’t done one of these retrospectives in a long time.

First of all I’d like to thank everyone for reviewing this. *ahem* thank you

Next, I loved the interpretation of chameleon’s Luna so much that of course I had to draw her. So, I took a different spin on their Luna, too. I gave her armor but sadly the horns on the side of her head didn’t translate as armor. I tried but I wanted to keep her hair as 2D as possible and giving it volume (heh) would have hindered the piece.

The strings did, as you said, link her to the scythe. I wanted to make them blue but they just looked faded and blended in if I did that.

Lastly, thank you for noticing that I didn’t put the stars in front of the moon.

Thanks ;3