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I Did My Best · Original Short Story ·
Organised by RogerDodger
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#1 ·
The Useless Umbrella is a venerable gag, so it’s fair to judge instances of it on their presentation.

The artwork is competent and supports the gag well. Kudos to the man for not completely losing his head, despite the style choice. I’m not sure that the center panel is necessary; it could have been joined with the upper, or all the panels joined into one huge one. This is a small point, though.

One thing that does bug me is the circle of light under the umbrella. Artist, I know you wanted to convey the fiery light on the landscape, but an umbrella blocks all light, not just meteor light, so the appearance of daylit sidewalk and shadow would have been much darkened instead. (As an aside, meteors may also give green light as they burn up; I happen to have seen one.)

I am ranking this piece in my mid tier.
#2 · 2
· · >>GroaningGreyAgony
Don't have much to GGA except, well...

Am I the only one who thinks the meteor looks like an egg? It's weird.
#3 ·
· · >>MrExtra
You aren't alone. It resembles the Cosmic Quail's Egg of Doom.
#4 ·
All I have to add is that the trajectory of the meteor(ite?) is a little off.

True, there may be reasons why the guy is just as doomed even if the thing misses him by a ten or twenty yards, but I don't think the extra step in our thought process adds anything to the picture. The subtext would have been more impactful if it was headed right for him.

Still. A neat picture. Thank you for submitting!
#5 ·
Fear the Space Chicken