A few typos, and it lapses into past tense once or twice, but other than that, it's sound. This is a really cute and goofy story, but what else would I expect from this author? There's just enough opportunity to characterize everyone, and this has more than just a few similarities with Flowers for Algernon, if that was a possible source of inspiration. I had a lot of fun with this.

>>Pascoite

Thanks!

Goofy was pretty much the point this time, so I'm glad it came through. Now to apply a little more polish and start submitting it to various and sundry venues!

Mike