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Insurmountable · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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Fog Lord
Can not take the step
First one can not be willed out
Trap in my own mind

Four walls hold me tight
Moldy door slightly ajar
Windows mock me now

Falling on the floor
Crawling slow to the exit
Shuffle to freedom
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Hm. Nice imagery, but I'm not sure what it's imagery of. Someone feels boxed in, but there's nothing specific for a reader to latch into and identify with. The strong point here is word choice.
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Can't set down the word
The one to start all right
I hold myself back

Until the pen moves
Covering the paper
Black strokes of meaning