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For You Can Never Go Back Again · Poetry Minific ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 15–1000
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The Reflection is Always Fainter.
Long and hopeful trip
Takes the half known dust choked roads,
Echoes through your time.
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Pretty much mirrors what Frost's famous poem says. Fits the haiku form well. Haiku are tricky, in that it's easy to write one, but it's hard to write one where it feels like every word is perfect and the whole thing stands out. For instance, the "hopeful" here feels like it's lacking context and thus doesn't really inform the rest. If I remove that, it still says what Frost did, and adding it back doesn't create any new meaning. It's not bad at all, just fine grains of looking for how to judge these, since they're all pretty good this round.