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You Are the Obstacle · Poetry Short Short ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 100–2000
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Lack of Hard Imagination
"Nine of nine bottles
You take one down to smash
Around and around"
- Redneck Ninja, his ramblings when we tried to get him off the boat.


So, we're on lake and sailing
With a good looking men and women
I'm nervous to all willy, so I have couple of drinks
Being the bonehead that I am, throw them overboard
Get my groove on, and we all have good time
Everything is great until we sail back
Something hits us from below
Lo and behold, a hole forms and the water seeps in
Only one who notices it is me
I'm still drunk and blame myself
Figure it was the junk I chucked
Do the best thing in my state of mind
Plug the hole with my behind
You heard me
With my butt
And I don't know what
But I do know we can still sail
I'm not going to jail
Hope none is the wiser
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I can't say I understand much here. The haiku was funny, and I'm guessing that by pairing the two poems as a single entry, that the second is from the perspective of the first one's subject. It's got some ridiculous humor to it, but more situational. I don't see an actual joke. Not sure if I'm suppose to get something out of how it kind of adopts a rhyme scheme at the end.

The second one feels more like someone speaking a story. Then it struck me how much free verse ends up sounding just like a greentext story, at least when it's not very abstract.
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As we safely landed
They congratulated me
And asked me how I thought so quick
Of an idea to save the day:
"It was a total ass-pull," I reply.