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Friendly Advice
The thing to remember when taking the air
Is open the mouth or the nose.
Attempted absorption through skin is a snare
For regular animal folk.
Of course, photosynthesis constantly shows
Creation's aware of the joke
It played on you animals, letting you pose
As masters instead of as meat.
Denying you're compost will weigh like a yoke
And shrivel your mind with deceit.
Accept it. It's nature, and falsehoods provoke
Reactions it's best to avoid.
Continue in motion, extending your feet
To trample us. Who'd be annoyed
At having their pollen dispersed in as neat
A fashion and spread to the sky?
Embrace symbiosis. The planet's enjoyed
Success when the kingdoms comply
By eating each other, our legions deployed
To balance the cosmos with care.
Together, we triumph. In parting, we die.
Simplicity beckons. Beware
Of thinking we're severed. Rejecting the lie,
Expanding, the universe grows.
Is open the mouth or the nose.
Attempted absorption through skin is a snare
For regular animal folk.
Of course, photosynthesis constantly shows
Creation's aware of the joke
It played on you animals, letting you pose
As masters instead of as meat.
Denying you're compost will weigh like a yoke
And shrivel your mind with deceit.
Accept it. It's nature, and falsehoods provoke
Reactions it's best to avoid.
Continue in motion, extending your feet
To trample us. Who'd be annoyed
At having their pollen dispersed in as neat
A fashion and spread to the sky?
Embrace symbiosis. The planet's enjoyed
Success when the kingdoms comply
By eating each other, our legions deployed
To balance the cosmos with care.
Together, we triumph. In parting, we die.
Simplicity beckons. Beware
Of thinking we're severed. Rejecting the lie,
Expanding, the universe grows.
I don't find any flaws in the meter, and I like the way the rhymes link between stanzas, even looping back to the beginning. I also appreciate it when poems don't feel obligated to end sentences (or clauses, for that matter) at the ends of lines. Kind of an over-the-top message about living in harmony with nature, but one well taken.