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I get this reference!
I don't know how much it is outside of the reference though. It's cute, but I kept expecting a twist that never came. It just plays the idea straight. There's a few funny little touches (the scp numbers, the thought of My Little SCP173) but they're buried pretty deep. So while I appreciate this idea (a lot!), I wish there was a little more that it was used for.
I don't know how much it is outside of the reference though. It's cute, but I kept expecting a twist that never came. It just plays the idea straight. There's a few funny little touches (the scp numbers, the thought of My Little SCP173) but they're buried pretty deep. So while I appreciate this idea (a lot!), I wish there was a little more that it was used for.
Doing my tour of stories with low count reviews.
A SCP entry. We already had one (maybe several) before, but this one stands out and I quite liked it. It's easier to actually find the story hidden inside the report than in most SPCs reports, and I think it's a good idea. This way, you don't throw an oblivous audience out of your story.
However, there are several little things that I think should have been erased, or have been erased differently.
There are two erased words where there should be only one. Having two parts gives some clue to guess what it's about (even if MLP is actually 3 words)
I think the 'he' should have been erased. Giving his genre isn't something that should appear in a SCP report.
And last, the dates you give are too much for a super secret report. We can understand that this is MLP you're talking about, so there is no need to have the dates almost fully displayed.
Anyway, I'm nitpicking and I'm not really a SCP specialist. Overall, it's good non-story where it's actually pretty easy to find the hidden story. Maybe a bit too easy for some people, but like I said, I'd rather see this way in a Writeoff round, in order to not lose any reader not familiar with SCP's reports.
Thank you for sharing.
A SCP entry. We already had one (maybe several) before, but this one stands out and I quite liked it. It's easier to actually find the story hidden inside the report than in most SPCs reports, and I think it's a good idea. This way, you don't throw an oblivous audience out of your story.
However, there are several little things that I think should have been erased, or have been erased differently.
They begin to search out information about the show ███ ███
There are two erased words where there should be only one. Having two parts gives some clue to guess what it's about (even if MLP is actually 3 words)
How did he even make a app
I think the 'he' should have been erased. Giving his genre isn't something that should appear in a SCP report.
And last, the dates you give are too much for a super secret report. We can understand that this is MLP you're talking about, so there is no need to have the dates almost fully displayed.
Anyway, I'm nitpicking and I'm not really a SCP specialist. Overall, it's good non-story where it's actually pretty easy to find the hidden story. Maybe a bit too easy for some people, but like I said, I'd rather see this way in a Writeoff round, in order to not lose any reader not familiar with SCP's reports.
Thank you for sharing.
That's "affected", not "effected", I'm pretty sure. Also, three, not 3 - use words for numbers less than three digits long, not counting zeroes. (three thousand, not 3,000.) Basically.
Anyways, this is... hmm. I've read some SCP stuff, recently, even, and this is a neat idea? I even think the sorta-meta aspect works; this is directly aimed at the readers here, which is great. The problem is, I didn't find it even remotely scary, which is, as far as I can tell, pretty much the whole point of the SCP thing. The format kinda makes it difficult to add a narrative, but you managed to get something in there, which was nice.
I'm not really sure if I've got any solid advice to give. If you want to try making this more scary, I'd suggest reading the "How To Be Scary Without Saying Anything" article at the SCP wiki, and this blog on "Horror, Terror, Dread", both of which are things I've found useful for thinking about horror stories.
As for adding more narrative... I'm not sure if that's easy to do, with the constraints of both formats overlapping. If you expand this, you might be able to do it?
Sorry if this advice isn't very helpful. I'm not much for writing or reading horror, and I'm not entirely certain if you intended this as horror, so I might be totally missing the point here.
Anyways, this is... hmm. I've read some SCP stuff, recently, even, and this is a neat idea? I even think the sorta-meta aspect works; this is directly aimed at the readers here, which is great. The problem is, I didn't find it even remotely scary, which is, as far as I can tell, pretty much the whole point of the SCP thing. The format kinda makes it difficult to add a narrative, but you managed to get something in there, which was nice.
I'm not really sure if I've got any solid advice to give. If you want to try making this more scary, I'd suggest reading the "How To Be Scary Without Saying Anything" article at the SCP wiki, and this blog on "Horror, Terror, Dread", both of which are things I've found useful for thinking about horror stories.
As for adding more narrative... I'm not sure if that's easy to do, with the constraints of both formats overlapping. If you expand this, you might be able to do it?
Sorry if this advice isn't very helpful. I'm not much for writing or reading horror, and I'm not entirely certain if you intended this as horror, so I might be totally missing the point here.
I like the idea, it has the adorbs, and it's written well.
This story makes me miss Present Perfect's absence after the Writeoff Bad Times. :raritydespair:
In part, because Present Perfect would know that this isn't an XK-class scenario. It's LK-class, for species transformation, because this isn't what 'end of the world' actually means in that genre. I like SCP stories (and this is adorable and has Good End), but this deviates too much from what SCP canon to connect to other SCP events. Since the story doesn't stand fully on its own without SCP, the deviations from canon are a notable flaw.
Otherwise, it's great. :yay:
This story makes me miss Present Perfect's absence after the Writeoff Bad Times. :raritydespair:
In part, because Present Perfect would know that this isn't an XK-class scenario. It's LK-class, for species transformation, because this isn't what 'end of the world' actually means in that genre. I like SCP stories (and this is adorable and has Good End), but this deviates too much from what SCP canon to connect to other SCP events. Since the story doesn't stand fully on its own without SCP, the deviations from canon are a notable flaw.
Otherwise, it's great. :yay:
Hm. Well, this piece does have a narrative arc and makes use of the SCP format. That's a good thing!
It's... not great as an SCP entry, though. Very bland, too much blanked out, and the narrative is a cookie cutter "oops it spread and ended the world" deal. Follow >>Not_A_Hat's links and do some reading on how to effectively use the format to achieve your goals. As it stands, this reads more like a basic mimicry of Things SCP Entries Do, which is a bit unexciting.
Thanks for writing, though. Keep practicing!
It's... not great as an SCP entry, though. Very bland, too much blanked out, and the narrative is a cookie cutter "oops it spread and ended the world" deal. Follow >>Not_A_Hat's links and do some reading on how to effectively use the format to achieve your goals. As it stands, this reads more like a basic mimicry of Things SCP Entries Do, which is a bit unexciting.
Thanks for writing, though. Keep practicing!