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Rise Again, Rise Again! · Poetry Short Short ·
Organised by Anon Y Mous
Word limit 100–2000
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Stepping to the Stars
I stepped back and it seemed the world did too,
Into the void of space, each separate.
I stepped again and now my field of view
Took in the planets, Sun, and stellar state.
I watched them turn as I from time withdrew
And eons turned to seconds, and the gait
Of gravity pulled Earth and stars anew
Around the common centers of their weight…

From here, the common scene I held as true
Was lost to sight and sense, and fell askew.
When blazing suns could follow paths sedate,
There seemed no room for hope to sink to hate.
I could but try to promise to eschew
Ideals transient as morning dew.
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Sonnet form, and at first I thought you were writing one without a meter, since the first line doesn't fit a stress pattern, but the rest do, so that opener could stand to be tuned up. Though "separate" will also depend on whether you mean the verb or adjective, and either one can parse there.

I'm stretching a bit for the meaning, but what I get from it is that the speaker is inspired by the scale of the universe to rise above petty things and not give in to hate, which is a nice sentiment.