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Modern Life
Complacencies chip at my eardrums like nails,
Engraving their patterns as slowly as snails
Or fast as hyenas pursuing their prey,
Attempting to mark me, to make me obey,
To grind me to powder with rages and wails.
The phone when it's buzzing, a sound that impales;
Aggression disguised by the jocular tales
The internet spreads in its righteous display:
Complacencies chip.
Enjoyment? Forget it! In multiple jails,
They lock the apostate who happily fails
But tries it regardless. Impatient, they say,
"Success is the only acceptable way!"
I strive for the daft, for when reason prevails,
Complacencies chip.
Engraving their patterns as slowly as snails
Or fast as hyenas pursuing their prey,
Attempting to mark me, to make me obey,
To grind me to powder with rages and wails.
The phone when it's buzzing, a sound that impales;
Aggression disguised by the jocular tales
The internet spreads in its righteous display:
Complacencies chip.
Enjoyment? Forget it! In multiple jails,
They lock the apostate who happily fails
But tries it regardless. Impatient, they say,
"Success is the only acceptable way!"
I strive for the daft, for when reason prevails,
Complacencies chip.
Kind of a rondeau form here? I've only written the redouble form myself, so I don't remember what the basic form's structure is. It's always tough to write a poem with so few rhyme sounds. The rhythm has no hitches in it.
Sounds like a screed against how online culture is very unforgiving of creative endeavors (or anything, really), which is true enough. It's kind of hard to discern that from the first stanza, but the tough structural demands of the form often make the narrative take somewhat of a back seat to word choices/phrasings that'll fit.
Sounds like a screed against how online culture is very unforgiving of creative endeavors (or anything, really), which is true enough. It's kind of hard to discern that from the first stanza, but the tough structural demands of the form often make the narrative take somewhat of a back seat to word choices/phrasings that'll fit.