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Praise unto thee, last minute muse. May thy inspiration guide us unto writing fics worthy of thy gifts.
The Equestrian Candidate
It took me about 10 seconds to realize what was happening with this fic, a couple minutes to read it, and another to recognize how this fits the prompt.
Wow author, this really is your funeral. Good luck.
It took me about 10 seconds to realize what was happening with this fic, a couple minutes to read it, and another to recognize how this fits the prompt.
Wow author, this really is your funeral. Good luck.
Quick note: Looks like comments/reviews on stories are correctly being reposted in the main discussion thread, but don't yet have any reference back to where they came from.
Edit: Aaaaand nevermind. Refresh made it add the reference.
Edit: Aaaaand nevermind. Refresh made it add the reference.
I like this. I like this a lot. You perfectly captured the solemn nature of the event and the weight of each action. Despite its natural slowness, I never found myself bored. I think the traditions that you put forth here would live extremely well in canon, were we to ever see such an event. I think the emotional pacing of this piece is where it really shines.
Non-spoilery conclusion: Top Contender
Wonderful implementation of the bait and switch. I'm quite accustomed to the switch being incredibly abrupt, instantaneously changing the entire meaning of the feel of the story. Here, I was treated to a quiet somberness that tempered the switch such that I only felt mild confusion as to whose funeral we truly were attending. It slowly became a rise of something akin to what Pinkie must have been feeling before reaching a triumphant plateau of realization that this is a story about how the Pies celebrate a coming of age.
The idea that they would have a funeral for their given name and choose a name for themselves is wonderful in my opinion. It also adds to the idea of Pinkie being the odd one for not following the rest of the family's naming convention of picking rock related names (though there might be a bit of a hole with Maud's name unless I'm missing a pun). The addition of Maurina Alice as Marble Pie helps serve as a hint to what's going on and adds an additional layer of consistency to the premise.
A job well done in my opinion!
Non-spoilery conclusion: Top Contender
Wonderful implementation of the bait and switch. I'm quite accustomed to the switch being incredibly abrupt, instantaneously changing the entire meaning of the feel of the story. Here, I was treated to a quiet somberness that tempered the switch such that I only felt mild confusion as to whose funeral we truly were attending. It slowly became a rise of something akin to what Pinkie must have been feeling before reaching a triumphant plateau of realization that this is a story about how the Pies celebrate a coming of age.
The idea that they would have a funeral for their given name and choose a name for themselves is wonderful in my opinion. It also adds to the idea of Pinkie being the odd one for not following the rest of the family's naming convention of picking rock related names (though there might be a bit of a hole with Maud's name unless I'm missing a pun). The addition of Maurina Alice as Marble Pie helps serve as a hint to what's going on and adds an additional layer of consistency to the premise.
A job well done in my opinion!
Odd. The reply button for post #337 is not showing for me (also missing on #302). Roger, may need to investigate when you get a chance. Not game breaking, just annoying. Attempting manual override:
>>GrandMoffPony
Funny you should say that just as I was opening tabs for commenting/reviewing those exact stories for that exact reason. You can expect at least some disparity. Depending on the reader, they may or may not leave a comment/review immediately and the review slates may just have fallen that the overactive users happened to get the same stories.
Some stories may either merit deeper discussion or future reviewers find items worth commenting on in other people's reviews. This can lead to conversations that may or may not artificially bloat a story's exposure. I'd say it's natural, but much easier to see on this forum rather than the old spreadsheet that only tracked reviews.
That said, there's some dedicated and awesome people out there that tend to intentionally leave some form of review on stories with less activity, especially when it's pointed out. Granted, that doesn't always happen on the first day of reviewing, but it tends to happen. This group seems to be very serious about getting at least some sort of feedback to every story out there.
>>GrandMoffPony
Funny you should say that just as I was opening tabs for commenting/reviewing those exact stories for that exact reason. You can expect at least some disparity. Depending on the reader, they may or may not leave a comment/review immediately and the review slates may just have fallen that the overactive users happened to get the same stories.
Some stories may either merit deeper discussion or future reviewers find items worth commenting on in other people's reviews. This can lead to conversations that may or may not artificially bloat a story's exposure. I'd say it's natural, but much easier to see on this forum rather than the old spreadsheet that only tracked reviews.
That said, there's some dedicated and awesome people out there that tend to intentionally leave some form of review on stories with less activity, especially when it's pointed out. Granted, that doesn't always happen on the first day of reviewing, but it tends to happen. This group seems to be very serious about getting at least some sort of feedback to every story out there.
I think I find this mildly enjoyable, and I am struggling to explain why it doesn't go further than that. It's a well written scene, it expands on the canon just enough to add a tiny bit of depth, and the characters are well written. I think that its failing for me is that though the scene adds depth, it's not enough depth or transformative enough to cause me to truly care about it. Not sure if that's just me or if I'm not the ideal audience. I may revisit this to expand a bit more on my thoughts.
Conclusion: Upper middle road due to good writing.
Conclusion: Upper middle road due to good writing.
That's where I know this from! The 1995 movie Tom and Huck had a similar scene. Took me a while because all my Google searches kept returning the older renditions or the books. Watched that as a little kid... I think I liked this better than the movie.
This was enjoyable and made me smile more than the nostalgia it brought up. Good job I say.
This was enjoyable and made me smile more than the nostalgia it brought up. Good job I say.
A rather odd entry. I tend to avoid Anon on general principle and thus have not had much experience with those stories, but I decided to bear it when I saw the continuous stream of spoilered traffic.
For feedback, I agree with the others that this is quite vague, almost to the point of infuriatingly vexing, but holds just enough promise to make me want to comb through it and figure it out... There's an undercurrent of emotion here just begging to be free, but it's so hard to find out exactly what it is... Edit: It's distracting enough that I completely forgot to look for a way that the story ties to the prompt.
I think I'll take a shot at helping the interpretation along. Or else I'll just muck it up even further. Never know until we try!
The first thing I notice is how the moment Twilight comes into the picture there is an immediate change in tense and perspective. The story is no longer 2nd person Anon focus, and we switch from present to past tense. Also notice Pinkie's position before and after the switch. Before the switch, I see no indication that Pinkie ever got off off Anon's shoulders, and after, she is tumbling off a countertop. Both lead me to believe that Anon is imaginary. I would even hazard a guess that Pinkie is narrating the first two thirds of this story and the words we are reading are her internal narrative and she's coming up with a backstory for Anon as she plays along with her fantasy.
Next, I see Twilight directly acknowledges the emptiness of Sugarcube Corner and hopes Pinkey isn't lonely. Immediately after she leaves, the mess is cleaned up. This could all be symbolism for loneliness and how Pinkie deals with it.
But why name Anon? It only occurs once in the entire story, indicating it is significant. Anon is clearly human as pointed out by horizon's analysis of the anatomy referenced throughout the story. No matter which way I approach it, this seems like a very deliberate and potentially calculated decision.
I have two theories that are as strong as a house of cards:
1) Anon is real, but not there. He's somewhere else, being cared for by Twilight Sparkle. He has gravitated toward her due to their similar backgrounds and interests. However, he has not noticed Pinkie Pie's extra attentions and she fantasizes about him a bit. I don't think this is correct since it doesn't match up as well with the idea of loneliness and the disappearing cake batter.
2) Anon is not real, but perhaps the fact that Anon is named such is meant to steer the story towards commentary on Anon stories and the authors that write about Anon. I was going to ramble some about how Pinkie acts around Anon and her attachment to him, but I'm very disappointed with how superfluous that makes Twilight's visit and ignores the fact that the cake is for a non-specific "he."
I'm flummoxed. Maybe the secret is in AJ's hay bales...
Edit: You're not the only one getting ninja'd, Trick.
For feedback, I agree with the others that this is quite vague, almost to the point of infuriatingly vexing, but holds just enough promise to make me want to comb through it and figure it out... There's an undercurrent of emotion here just begging to be free, but it's so hard to find out exactly what it is... Edit: It's distracting enough that I completely forgot to look for a way that the story ties to the prompt.
I think I'll take a shot at helping the interpretation along. Or else I'll just muck it up even further. Never know until we try!
The first thing I notice is how the moment Twilight comes into the picture there is an immediate change in tense and perspective. The story is no longer 2nd person Anon focus, and we switch from present to past tense. Also notice Pinkie's position before and after the switch. Before the switch, I see no indication that Pinkie ever got off off Anon's shoulders, and after, she is tumbling off a countertop. Both lead me to believe that Anon is imaginary. I would even hazard a guess that Pinkie is narrating the first two thirds of this story and the words we are reading are her internal narrative and she's coming up with a backstory for Anon as she plays along with her fantasy.
Next, I see Twilight directly acknowledges the emptiness of Sugarcube Corner and hopes Pinkey isn't lonely. Immediately after she leaves, the mess is cleaned up. This could all be symbolism for loneliness and how Pinkie deals with it.
But why name Anon? It only occurs once in the entire story, indicating it is significant. Anon is clearly human as pointed out by horizon's analysis of the anatomy referenced throughout the story. No matter which way I approach it, this seems like a very deliberate and potentially calculated decision.
I have two theories that are as strong as a house of cards:
1) Anon is real, but not there. He's somewhere else, being cared for by Twilight Sparkle. He has gravitated toward her due to their similar backgrounds and interests. However, he has not noticed Pinkie Pie's extra attentions and she fantasizes about him a bit. I don't think this is correct since it doesn't match up as well with the idea of loneliness and the disappearing cake batter.
2) Anon is not real, but perhaps the fact that Anon is named such is meant to steer the story towards commentary on Anon stories and the authors that write about Anon. I was going to ramble some about how Pinkie acts around Anon and her attachment to him, but I'm very disappointed with how superfluous that makes Twilight's visit and ignores the fact that the cake is for a non-specific "he."
I'm flummoxed. Maybe the secret is in AJ's hay bales...
Edit: You're not the only one getting ninja'd, Trick.
@Roger
Bug report: One off error
Severity: Trivial to Minor
Environment: Main Discussion Thread
Not sure if it's a one off error or the server trying to serve data that's not yet available/synchronized, but at 900 posts, an empty page 10 has been created for me. Noticed this earlier but someone else posted again before I could double check what I was seeing.
Bug report: One off error
Severity: Trivial to Minor
Environment: Main Discussion Thread
Not sure if it's a one off error or the server trying to serve data that's not yet available/synchronized, but at 900 posts, an empty page 10 has been created for me. Noticed this earlier but someone else posted again before I could double check what I was seeing.
>>horizon
>>FanOfMostEverything
A Deal to Die For Twice — Flim and Flam get a huge head start on their new business venture by signing an exlcusivity agreement with Sweetie Drops.
A Curious Case To Die For — They then go out of business as they realize the entire population of Ponyville has been made immortal.
>>FanOfMostEverything
A Deal to Die For Twice — Flim and Flam get a huge head start on their new business venture by signing an exlcusivity agreement with Sweetie Drops.
A Curious Case To Die For — They then go out of business as they realize the entire population of Ponyville has been made immortal.