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>>GroaningGreyAgony
Thanks for the creepiness/weirdness points! And yeah, I was mostly just Weird-fiction vibing at the very end. I didn't have some specific cataclysm or apocalypse worldbuilding in mind. I can say that this was meant to be forward-then-backward time-travel, not a parallel world. Also, there's meant to be Something Weird about (as in concerning, not necessarily in, save for Morgan being in it) the town, and about Morgan, that drew the Others there and to the region, and from there to the country and the world. And that's why Quinn is especially surprised to find another human right here. For the Others, I had a vague sense of their being harbinger- and/or reaper-monsters, which either came from the Sun or were messing with the Sun.
Thanks for the creepiness/weirdness points! And yeah, I was mostly just Weird-fiction vibing at the very end. I didn't have some specific cataclysm or apocalypse worldbuilding in mind. I can say that this was meant to be forward-then-backward time-travel, not a parallel world. Also, there's meant to be Something Weird about (as in concerning, not necessarily in, save for Morgan being in it) the town, and about Morgan, that drew the Others there and to the region, and from there to the country and the world. And that's why Quinn is especially surprised to find another human right here. For the Others, I had a vague sense of their being harbinger- and/or reaper-monsters, which either came from the Sun or were messing with the Sun.
>>Pascoite
Yeah, I struggled with the format/the wordcount limit. My draft was actually about 1500 words, and I had to cut about half the story, primarily from the beginning (which would have made the pace slower, and Morgan's situation and perspective clearer, I think). But also from toward-the-end; the conversation was slower, and there were a few more hints of worldbuilding. The very end was pretty much just vibes, though.
Yeah, I struggled with the format/the wordcount limit. My draft was actually about 1500 words, and I had to cut about half the story, primarily from the beginning (which would have made the pace slower, and Morgan's situation and perspective clearer, I think). But also from toward-the-end; the conversation was slower, and there were a few more hints of worldbuilding. The very end was pretty much just vibes, though.
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