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It Could Have Gone Better · FiM Minific ·
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Characterizations are good, but it seems like it’s missing something.
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The way that you've got lines radiating out from the corners of the window made me think that this perspective was from the inside of an oven or a box. It's a little odd, but I definitely liked the piece more when I started noticing the things like their manes, or Flutter's expressive eyes. Compared to your other entries, this one does feel a little muted in tone/intensity, but that might just be from the subject matter.
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“Fluttershy, how do you get your oven so clean?”
“I… I take it out in the rain, and ask it politely.”
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Thank you so much for making this Haze!!

I'm so glad you included the rain and I love her expression of sadness. <3