So yeah, Sentinel is my story. Consensus seems to be the writing is all right, but that there's no tension (which I agree with).

I planned on giving a reason for the guardian being there, something like the grave he guards being that of a close friend or family member. I also thought about giving him an internal conflict of wanting to die but being unable. But it was late and I was tired so I went to bed instead :P

Thanks for the reviews, and good luck with the final to those of you still in the game.

ps. For those of you with weak google-fu, Anapa is the Egyptian vocalisation of ı͗npw, the name of Anubis.

>>RawCringe >>JudgeDeadd >>Not_A_Hat >>Monokeras >>Monokeras >>Shadowed_Song >>AndrewRogue >>FrontSevens

Not a story, feels like the author venting. I wasn't hooked at all, and besides, this kind of thinking comes across as pretty ridiculous to me, so not a big fan of this one.

>>Baal Bunny

Or perhaps a spectral phantom

Before I knew spectral could also mean ghost-like, I used the alias Spectral Shade - "colourful shadow" (edgy, right?). Of course, it could also mean "Ghostly Ghost".

I don't understand what you're going for here. The first paragraph and last two lines feel out of place, and there's some spelling/grammatical/formatting errors.

Too bad it wasn't finished. I liked the lore in the beginning - wasn't very interested in the climbing man, however. If you ever revisit this, I say write more about the fairies.

the Castle in the Clouds is where you can catch a fairy of your very own

And then you go on to say you have to be invited to even get there.

edit: If the stuff about fairies didn't really matter and the whole point was the ending, that's pretty clever, but not really a story and a bit too meta.

I like it, then again I am a fan of this kind of fiction. The technobabble wasn't that bad, imo.

>>Trick_Question
Someone please explain what Ot means. I never learned, and I've been afraid of asking.

Thanks for the reviews, I appreciate it.

>>Pascoite

it's very easy to ascribe a lot more intent to it than the author ever had

I like that about more abstract art, it's really in the eye of the beholder. It's a nice interpretation you've got.

>>Light_Striker
>>Bachiavellian
>>GroaningGreyAgony

I had a theme in mind when writing. Death of the author & all that, but if you're interested, the rain is a metaphor.

Tbh, I think this is way too barebones at the moment. No notifications, no pages, no avatars, no way of finding replies to a comment, finding out which comment someone is replying to makes you lose track of the comment you were reading. Also no avatars, no emoticons, and no "alias pages" - I'd love to find my way back to people's fimfiction pages from here - perhaps by letting every alias include a link. Also no comment preview.

Images maybe work? Testing below:
[img]http://www.animalsbase.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/06/Pony.jpg[/img]
Nope.
Can I edit a comment? Yepp.

>>Spectral
Forgot to mention: this is a step in the right direction, of course. Expecting people to sign up for fimfic accounts for general fiction contests is dumb.