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Under the Sun · FiM Short Story ·
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Too Much Sun
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#1 · 1
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Were her wings made of wax, and did they melt?

I think just a wee bit of background could help this piece. It looks to me like she is falling through the air, but perhaps she’s just supposed to be sprawled on the ground, exhausted from the heat as implied by the caption. The sun looks rather close for her to be somewhere on the ground, though, and the white background does not resemble space or the sky.
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I thought that Celestia's back right leg was her tail dock at first. Make of that what you will.
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That's actually a pretty good drawing of Celestia. If you had put the same amount of skill and effort into adding a background, this would probably be a really good picture.
#4 · 1
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Another entry that goes for minimalism, though I'm not certain how well it serves you: with nothing but the Celestia figure and the sun, it's a little difficult to figure out the implied story here, as >>GroaningGreyAgony notes. I'll join the crowd requesting some sort of background, even if it's just a horizon line. (>inb4 some wag submits art whose background is a quote from one of my stories)

There's definite effort made here toward cleaning up the sketchiness of the piece, which I appreciate. Your lines look solid despite some obvious buildup (a few stray bits sticking out on curves), the cutie mark is nice fine detail, and the mane coloration in particular is very clean on the exterior edges (mixing hand-sketched lines with digital fill coloring is usually a recipe for rasterization problems; looks like you've got the layer masking thing down). The sun's rays strike me as odd, though — they look a bit like orange hands.

You've got some spotting in the area-where-her-wings-should-be that I'm not certain is intentional. But the strangest thing about the missing wings is that she does have her full auroral hair — this clearly isn't pre-ascension Celestia. That strongly implies some sort of trauma which kinda distracts from the theme of the piece.

It strikes me that her regalia (chest-thing/hoof-things/tiara) is missing, too, which might imply further story or might just point to a lack of art time.

Thank you for entering! The quality of the effort here is admirable; I just wish there was more pic to admire. :)