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Putting the "Laid" in "The Best Laid Plans"
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#1 · 3
· · >>Icenrose >>Zaid Val'Roa
This one's easy to analyze. Phew.

So here's literally another fanart-ish picture, as in, it's literally something that happened (?) in the story, and the artist here went aight, here's how it looked like. Bam. Fucking A. Which means I don't have to wax poetic about how this means that and the framing means blahblah melancholy blahblah abstract representation of whatever.

Nah. Straight face here. Figure A: Tiff. Figure B: Magpie. Bam. Next thing.

So this one looks good! The drawings are nice, you can read the expression of Magpie rather well, and Tiff has -- well, she has hair, which is all we can see, but it's well-drawn hair. There's a clear contrast in their respective color palettes that I like a lot; likewise, when you look at it well, you see Tiff has rather long eyelashes, which gives her figure a little bit more character and emphasizes that she's a girl, I suppose.

However, all the detail that went into the faces clearly didn't go into Tiff's armor, which is less an actual armor and more a series of random shapes that kinda represent the abstract idea of a leather armor. Her shoulder is also either dislocated or weird, I'm afraid, and doesn't really fit her position at all. Magpie looks a bit better in that regard, but that's because we barely see anything but her head and hair -- nice hair, too, although it looks a tad strange near her forehead; I see what you're going for and it looks nice, but if you look at it too hard it looks like it's way too close to her head, or there are bold patches somewhere that we don't see due to perspective.

That's a bit of nitpicking, to be honest. Background suggests a river and some grass, I'm assuming, since we're looking down; it might be that they're on a very tall hill and the blue thing is the sky. Doesn't really matter; it's not the focus and so it's literally out of focus, and that serves the picture well. Trying to have a more defined background would take away from the main point of the picture, I think, if it has such vibrant colors, so having a green-and-blue blob was the best choice here.

It's well-drawn! But yeah, some details are a bit wonky here and there. That's my main takeaway here.


A little detail, though -- I'm fairly sure this didn't happen in the story proper? As in, it didn't even happen off-screen. The whole kiss scene was unplanned, and Tiff made it up on the spot; the characters never got around to like, practicing it, which is I think what is going on in the pic.

That doesn't really affect the picture of its execution, though, it's just me wondering out loud. Overall, nice work, artist! I like the hair a lot.
#2 · 1
· · >>Zaid Val'Roa
All I can do is reiterate what >>Aragon says above, though I would like to emphasize the loveliness of both Tiff and Magpie's hair, and how well composed Magpie's expression is. Well done, Artist!
#3 · 1
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And here you can pinpoint the moment where my thesis assessor told my partner and I would have to present an approximate 56 plans and schematics by December 17th.
I can't promise I won't die.
Anyway, >>Aragon got it right. This was a more direct depiction of the very ending of the story. Because I thought it was neat.
I'm glad Tiff and Madeleine's expressions carried enough emotion to still make this drawing feel interesting. (>>Icenrose Thanks!)
I originally planned to make Tiff's leather armour pop out more, and even sketched the castle behind them and the crowd down below. However, the aforementioned thesis situation threw a wrench into my plan and just didn't have the time to go with my full idea. Rather than scrap it, I decided to at least complete the painting of the leather armour and did the most basic background possible.
I wish I could've finished this piece, but what's done, I like.