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Tricks and Sticks
I’ve wasted all the time I can
And bungled plans, where I knew how
Obscured what blazes I could see
Put off the pathway, here and now
I asked a frog if he could swim
And housed him in a tackle box
And threw it down the rabbit hole
To save him hopping to the docks
I measured every feathered switch
Which runs anfractuous through the ferns
To figure how the crow might fly
If flying gave its stomach churns.
I’ve given up, where time allowed
And gotten lost ere I was prone
To seed my hopes in listlessness
So not confused by something known
At dinner in his den that night
I wondered where the fox did run
He grinned, and said, “You ought to know
When not to dash a joke for fun.”
And bungled plans, where I knew how
Obscured what blazes I could see
Put off the pathway, here and now
I asked a frog if he could swim
And housed him in a tackle box
And threw it down the rabbit hole
To save him hopping to the docks
I measured every feathered switch
Which runs anfractuous through the ferns
To figure how the crow might fly
If flying gave its stomach churns.
I’ve given up, where time allowed
And gotten lost ere I was prone
To seed my hopes in listlessness
So not confused by something known
At dinner in his den that night
I wondered where the fox did run
He grinned, and said, “You ought to know
When not to dash a joke for fun.”
Ah, a companion piece? Depending on circumstances, these can be against the rules. For my part, I'll just take it as a standalone thing as if I hadn't read "All the Time There Is: first.
It has a similar theme of not taking things too seriously, but it's harder to tease a narrative out of it for me. I don't really see a point it's making, and it seems to be more randomness than anything else. Structurally similar, but with a different rhyme scheme. There's richer imagery in this one, but the other had a clearer message and a more demanding structure (though this one sticks to its structure better).
Ah, no, three different authors, so it was just coincidence that two of you chose to use the prompt as the first line. I guess being in iambic tetrameter already does lend itself to be useful that way. Whoever submitted the prompt (really, only one person submitted one?), did you plan it that way?
It has a similar theme of not taking things too seriously, but it's harder to tease a narrative out of it for me. I don't really see a point it's making, and it seems to be more randomness than anything else. Structurally similar, but with a different rhyme scheme. There's richer imagery in this one, but the other had a clearer message and a more demanding structure (though this one sticks to its structure better).
Ah, no, three different authors, so it was just coincidence that two of you chose to use the prompt as the first line. I guess being in iambic tetrameter already does lend itself to be useful that way. Whoever submitted the prompt (really, only one person submitted one?), did you plan it that way?
>>Pascoite
I think the meter is exactly what it was, and I thought it was neat to have two entries grown from the same 'seed'.
The line "I've wasted all the time I can" has a note of paradox to me; as in, "I've wasted all the time I can (If only I could put more time and effort into the matter!)" So I tried to develop some imagery along the lines of 'saving time by going down a rabbit hole', 'ruining a joke for fun', etc.
I had a friend say once: "It's easier to find humor from the seat of seriousness than seriousness from the seat of humor." The fox sits at the seat of humor.
I think the meter is exactly what it was, and I thought it was neat to have two entries grown from the same 'seed'.
The line "I've wasted all the time I can" has a note of paradox to me; as in, "I've wasted all the time I can (If only I could put more time and effort into the matter!)" So I tried to develop some imagery along the lines of 'saving time by going down a rabbit hole', 'ruining a joke for fun', etc.
I had a friend say once: "It's easier to find humor from the seat of seriousness than seriousness from the seat of humor." The fox sits at the seat of humor.